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Sunshine filtered through the blinds of the bedroom window with a bright determination illuminating the dust motes. All was an atmosphere of silence and peace but to Chioma it heralded another failure and a sense of panic. She looked down at the figure lying beside her, fast asleep. He had kept her up most of the night with his demands, she had given in to him and now she had to get him out of her marital bed.

For daylight meant that her husband, Dapo, would soon be home from his night shift. He worked at the Royal Island Hotel and Resort in V.I. which was where they had met. She had just started her new position on the reception desk which he had recently vacated to become the assistant manager. Everyone had been congratulating him when he had approached her.

“So you’re the one they got in to fill my shoes?” Dapo had said smugly at least she’d thought so. She’d looked down at her feet.

“I am if you wear four inch stiletto heels,” she had replied which elicited snorts of laughter from those in company. She had failed on purpose to mention that they were in fact Ferragamo heels. He did not need to know, no body needed to know because if she had mentioned it they would have asked how a girl who just got her first job after her NYSC could afford designer heels and then of course she would have had to explain that her father owned the Royal Island Hotel plus five other hotels and restaurants besides and had insisted that she do a stint there while trying to work out what she actually wanted to do with her life.

“That’s seriously nice footwear,” Dapo had observed, “But you do realise you’ll be on your feet all day as a concierge and come seven pm you will feel like killing the inventor of stilettos?”

“Alas Roger Vivier is no longer with us so you need not fear that I will turn homicidal on his accord and for your information I have partied for forty-eight hours non-stop in higher heels than these, I really don’t think I’m going to break a sweat over a ten hour shift.”“Okay, they’re your ankles” he had said with a shrug and walked off to the management suite.

She had thought him presumptuous but at five o’clock that evening when she felt like chopping her own feet off because they had become so unbearably uncomfortable in her heels it was Dapo who had come to relieve her.

“There’s a bowl of warm salted water in the management bathroom waiting for you,” he had said and she had felt like kissing him in gratitude and nearly told him so but checked herself at the last minute.

“Oh? Is that usual practice for new members of staff?” Chioma had asked with an arched eyebrow.

“Of course, a bowl of warm salted water to do whatever you want with is a traditional welcoming gesture for all new employees at the Royal, didn’t you get the memo?” then he had tilted his head, smiled and winked at her.

“Humph,” she had retorted, it was all she could manage as his smile had totally overwhelmed her. Then she had proceeded to the management suites as elegantly as her swollen feet would allow her.

Needless to say it had not taken long before they started dating in earnest. He had such an easy charming way about him that just seemed to help make her life a more pleasant one. She honestly did not know what she would do without Dapo and yet here she was, three years into their marriage, betraying his trust.

She sighed heavily before checking the bedside table for her watch, she found it behind the empty bottles and glasses; seven o’clock, her husband would be back in at least half an hour. The panic rose in her again, she turned, resolute to get him up and out but then she saw his face.

He was beautiful. His long eyelashes curled over, she always told him how unfair it was that he should have such lashes and she should have to pay out for mascara or false ones to get a similar effect. They weren’t exactly wasted on him as he knew how to bat them to effect, getting the ladies to swoon over him; it certainly helped him win her around time and time again. Then there were his lips that seemed to be fixed in a permanent pout practically asking to be kissed which she did right then.

No, this had no effect in waking up. She marvelled at how he could sleep with such abandonment now but she supposed he really did not have a care in the world. He didn’t have a job to get to; he had no money worries because there was always someone there to pay for him, mainly her. Even on the occasions when they were out in public, perfect strangers, usually women were always offering him something. It made her proud to know she was the one he was with but she also worried because she knew that one day she would lose him. Some girl would come along and snatch him away from her. She knew she was being greedy as well as completely selfish but she was totally unprepared to give him up any time soon.

Suddenly her chest tightened as she heard a subdued beep then a metallic creaking as the front gates were swung open. Dapo was home!

Why had she wasted time being whimsical? It was barely seconds later when she heard him bounding up the stairs, Oh no, oh god, oh no, she thought. In the next moment the door had swung open and Dapo was there.

“Good morning honey! I brought croissants and…” Chioma studied her husband’s face as the expression mutated from joy to confusion to intense suspicion.

“What is he doing in our bed?” he asked, his voice was quiet and measured.

“He…I…We couldn’t…” she stuttered in guilt.

“Chioma I thought we agreed he would be sleeping in his cot now, after all he is two years old and it’s not as though you’re breast-feeding anymore,” Dapo said.

“I know, but he just wouldn’t settle so I brought him here. Ah come and look at him, he looks so peaceful,” Chioma cooed.

Dapo slipped his shoes off and approached the bed softly, “Hmm, peaceful only because he’s asleep. I know my boy, the son of a lion is also a lion,” he whispered, smiling down at the small figure rolled up in the sheets. Carefully he picked the little boy up and shifted him along then he got on the bed with the rest of his family, very soon he was snoring. Chioma sighed contentedly and watched over the two men in her life as they slept.

Photo Credit: www.shymagazine.com

88 Comments

  1. jennifer

    September 28, 2010 at 11:23 am

    oh my GOD!!!!!!!!!!
    that was suspense in excess.nice one but i think theres a little problem with the prose in the sense that the writer made us think it was her lover she was in bed with because theres absolutely nothing wrong with being in bed with ur baby son so why the fear and guilt? and the line where she said” here i am BETRAYING his trust”?????
    does being in bed with your son have anything to do with betrayal?
    I think she over-exaggerated the whole emotions about her husband coming home to see the person on her bed but its a nice piece though.

    • mike

      September 29, 2010 at 8:08 pm

      Betrayal in the sense that they both agreed that the baby would be sleeping in his cot.

  2. jennifer

    September 28, 2010 at 11:23 am

    plus YAY am first to comment 😀

  3. onyinye

    September 28, 2010 at 11:37 am

    my heart almost missed a beat! for a sec i thought she was being unfaithful. nice write up.

  4. shayogirl

    September 28, 2010 at 11:39 am

    Tease!!!!! Nice one!!!! First? 🙂

  5. Atilade

    September 28, 2010 at 11:55 am

    This is a 9ice one! Can you imagine, i tot there was another man!

  6. efed

    September 28, 2010 at 11:56 am

    lol… Nice one oh!!! The point of this is???

  7. [email protected]

    September 28, 2010 at 11:58 am

    suspense filled….nice prose.

    • omogekofo

      September 28, 2010 at 1:20 pm

      the point is that ABBY can write suspense. lol

  8. dee

    September 28, 2010 at 12:06 pm

    Yeah I agree with Jennifer. Nice turn, but somethings coulda been left out. “three years into their marriage, betraying his trust.”, that was a little to extreme for a little boy. And then the part about having to give him up “soon”..for a 2yr old? That’s not anytime soon boo.

    I like the unpredictability of it though!

  9. FollyKay

    September 28, 2010 at 12:19 pm

    Very Well executed!
    I expected a dramatic scene after Dayo walked in, my heart was racing with excitement and I had already made up various scenarios in my head of what was about to happen. Despite my expectations of a dramatic end, the writer did a fantastic job and the end was perfect.
    Well done
    FollyKay

  10. Ngozi

    September 28, 2010 at 12:27 pm

    Nice….betraying cos her husband has probably warned her to not let the baby sleep in their bed…some baby boys can get very possesive of their mothers to the point of denying daddy “free access” lol!

  11. Rosie

    September 28, 2010 at 12:29 pm

    chai! grrr…..nice one

  12. tally babe

    September 28, 2010 at 12:34 pm

    Nice write up Abby.
    @Jennifer, i understand your concern about the writer’s exaggeration and for a moment i was almost agreeing with you. I just remembered a friend who has problems with her marriage because her husband believes she spends so much time and pours all her attention on the baby. SHe sneaks to check him up twice at night cos the almost two years old has to stay in his own bedroom. The husband would be livid he she over dotes on him. That is his first child but believe me, no one understands the logic, cos strange things do happen

  13. Fiona

    September 28, 2010 at 12:55 pm

    Nice one.Very well written.

  14. Silky

    September 28, 2010 at 12:56 pm

    @Jennifer – im guessing you dont have kids cos if you did you would understand the betrayal of trust a bit better. It could very well have been that Dapo did not want to share his bed with his son and wanted his wife alone back to the bed with most of her attention on him and his needs thus making his son a little more independent. This makes mothers feel a bit guilty in that theyre not truly ready to let their little baby be a little man. the author may have sensationalized it a bit but i got her.
    Brilliant Prose Abby!!!!

    • FirstIWantToDanceWithYouPere

      September 28, 2010 at 6:20 pm

      @Jennifer – im guessing you dont have kids cos if you did you would understand the betrayal of trust a bit better. …gosh!!!you people take things to far and seriously here!!!I bow for una!

  15. madforChrist

    September 28, 2010 at 1:03 pm

    nice suspense! though over exaggerated but nice nice!!

  16. jessy

    September 28, 2010 at 1:13 pm

    oh! my GOD…………….nice one, perfectly well done, …….WOW. i actually thot dere was some1 else not knowin …..

  17. Kunbistic

    September 28, 2010 at 1:22 pm

    nice one = you guys got me!!!! more more more prose please!!! 🙂

  18. tols

    September 28, 2010 at 1:41 pm

    really nice…i had to scroll back to check why my mind had initially wandered to a strange man….nicely written Abby…Hurry up and work on a book jor, 🙂

  19. Management

    September 28, 2010 at 1:57 pm

    WOW!!!! Excellent!

  20. chic

    September 28, 2010 at 2:03 pm

    so nice…gosh i almost screamed out at work cos of this…..lol
    very well written

  21. jennifer

    September 28, 2010 at 2:12 pm

    @silky i got her too i just stated my opinion which i maintain.

  22. jennifer

    September 28, 2010 at 2:16 pm

    @efed good question.

  23. jennifer

    September 28, 2010 at 2:21 pm

    @Tally babe are us serious about your friend?well, i don’t have kids so i cant quite understand but i don’t think showing love to ones kid is supposed to affect a man/husband.why should a mum feel guilty for carrying out her duties to her baby?but i guess its a funny world we live in.

    • nkemgi

      September 28, 2010 at 3:22 pm

      i do totally agree with jenifer dat the whole suspense thing was overrated. rem she also wrote He had kept her up most of the night with his demands, she had given in to him and now she had to get him out of her marital bed.

  24. kehnie

    September 28, 2010 at 2:22 pm

    wow,I almost had hypertension just becos I thought d husband will caught his wife and lover 2gether in bed,nice write up,do keep it up.

    • Gbagaun Mopol

      September 28, 2010 at 5:08 pm

      “will CAUGHT?????” <— CHEI!!!! This one is a #Gbagaun oh!

    • Omada

      September 28, 2010 at 11:31 pm

      chei!!! ldkm! which one be Gbagaun Mopol again? chei, i don piss for pant…

  25. viv

    September 28, 2010 at 2:25 pm

    suspense was good. i enjoyed it and heaved a sign of relief when i discovered it was his son. yeah yeah it may have been exagerated but thats the idea. your nt supposed to guess right. abby good for you.

  26. Kay

    September 28, 2010 at 2:58 pm

    Well written. I really did think she was having an affair and I was so relieved to find out she wasn’t.

  27. fokasibe

    September 28, 2010 at 3:12 pm

    You are such a tease! Nice! Me likey!

  28. Myne Whitman

    September 28, 2010 at 3:15 pm

    Hahha, you got me there, lol…

  29. Miss ATL

    September 28, 2010 at 3:18 pm

    nice!

  30. Oshokeme

    September 28, 2010 at 3:51 pm

    I burst into such a huge smile at the end. I loved it!

  31. remy

    September 28, 2010 at 3:59 pm

    nyc

  32. Aibee

    September 28, 2010 at 4:24 pm

    Breath easy! I was actually waiting for the kasala to burst. great suspense Abby.

  33. eazzie E

    September 28, 2010 at 4:36 pm

    this is hawt. you got my mind in an overrated foray of activities and amazingly with just words. nice! nice! nice! nice!
    more more please more! now am making my own demands

  34. africanchikito no.1

    September 28, 2010 at 5:06 pm

    i like!

  35. Gray-Shores

    September 28, 2010 at 5:32 pm

    Splendid!… I love the suspense.

  36. og

    September 28, 2010 at 5:51 pm

    AaawwWww,dat was nerve wrackn n soul soothn at d same time,luv luv luv it..good job dear.

  37. chydee

    September 28, 2010 at 5:59 pm

    Nice one !!!

  38. Zena

    September 28, 2010 at 6:11 pm

    lol, that was good, you should’ve seen how my eyes widened, wonderful write upAbby….

  39. Ib

    September 28, 2010 at 6:40 pm

    LOL..got me!good one

  40. it's just me

    September 28, 2010 at 8:02 pm

    nice write-up.. but i think it was overplayed .

    • chydee

      September 29, 2010 at 8:44 am

      What was overplayed? Please write yours, let us see.

  41. sophie

    September 28, 2010 at 8:30 pm

    Wow..my heart skipped a beat..nice one..

  42. mariaah

    September 28, 2010 at 8:50 pm

    Grrrrrr OMG!!! Abby you write wella and put the S in suspense.. chi mo!!!Didn’t see that coming at all…

  43. modelgirl02

    September 28, 2010 at 9:26 pm

    Nice, I loved that little part of suspense. Great job!

  44. modelgirl02

    September 28, 2010 at 9:26 pm

    Nice, I loved that little part of suspense…

  45. missy-spectacularrr

    September 28, 2010 at 9:34 pm

    KAI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    got me there!neat!

  46. ego

    September 28, 2010 at 10:21 pm

    Over done and exaggerated. The end was very uninpiring. Another mediocre piece getting poitive feedback. Happy for yu guys 🙂

    • tired of madame ego

      September 29, 2010 at 10:07 am

      And here we have you again with your critical attitude. It is a wonder how you get out of bed every morning? My question to you is simple, if you don’t like reading BN prose, why on earth do you keep coming back to read it and even go further to labour us with your less than welcomed comments? Madame Quality, everyone here has told you to publish your own article yet we seem to be waiting in vain. Could it be that the limit to your superiority lies in critising others because you lack any semblance of talent??? HISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS.

      Please Abbey keep them coming, this Ego has no clue about anything but the length of her stuck up nose! I am just tired of her comments!

    • Kay 1..

      October 21, 2010 at 2:23 pm

      abeg who is this Ego??? pick ur own pen n paper now…ah ah why give us BN readers headache with ur rants…..r u frustrated by life or something? we r not experts at writing, we just come here to have a laugh n yes sometimes get inspired! ….seriously!!

  47. patrice krekreghe

    September 28, 2010 at 11:46 pm

    i really like that!!!

  48. Omada

    September 28, 2010 at 11:47 pm

    awww…. how sweet! loved the suspense.
    i understand the woman’s anxiety sha.

  49. Omada

    September 28, 2010 at 11:48 pm

    the guy in that picture is cute!

  50. jen

    September 29, 2010 at 12:14 am

    I didn’t have time to read all that, but I musst say that women have been having affairs for centuries, it’s about damn time.

    Some men need a second or even third wife, have they ever thought that their wife needed another husband?

    • Omada

      September 30, 2010 at 2:05 am

      its not about a woman having an affair per se…

  51. D.O.T.M.H.

    September 29, 2010 at 12:24 am

    Loooolll… nice!

  52. ayo coker

    September 29, 2010 at 2:05 am

    Wonderful prose.I enjoyed the suspense. My husband was exactly like Dapo when my son was born and is still the same way till today when my sn show me affection.Don’t get me wrong he love his son but would like his wife to be left alone for him.

  53. Biker l'omo

    September 29, 2010 at 5:14 am

    over exaggerated.Haba! Guilt, panic, betrayal all because THEIR CHILD was in bed with her …and no i am not a HATER o!

  54. the pregger woman

    September 29, 2010 at 5:25 am

    why did i know it was a baby in her bed? maybe its because i’m pregnant and have bin havng lots of baby thots…well written and the suspense was good

  55. mememe

    September 29, 2010 at 7:33 am

    nice wrk

  56. t-girl

    September 29, 2010 at 7:33 am

    OMG, this girl wants to kill me o!!!!

    the suspense was too much….nice!

  57. jennifer

    September 29, 2010 at 9:18 am

    @jen lwkmd please read the prose .its not what you think darling.

  58. ay

    September 29, 2010 at 11:54 am

    am so loving this..

  59. chinnydiva

    September 29, 2010 at 12:05 pm

    @Jen, u shld have taken time to read d entire piece. The lady in question wasnt having an affair, the writer just made it seem that way to draw out the suspense.
    Nice prose btw,I absolutely love d suspense..kudos to Abbey

  60. Atilade

    September 29, 2010 at 1:00 pm

    @ Gbagaun Mopol, U bad! LOL

  61. honeybee

    September 29, 2010 at 1:32 pm

    @ Gbagaun Mopo… ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha. I am dying of laughter and im at work!!

  62. doll

    September 29, 2010 at 2:45 pm

    i was thinking she would have gallivanted into action to get the “HE” out of the bed, since she had enough warning, hearing the gates open..

    Was totally unprepared for the end.

    I like

  63. [email protected]

    September 29, 2010 at 3:06 pm

    @ jen…..pls read tru b4 passin a comment.

  64. bcgeorge

    September 29, 2010 at 3:27 pm

    gBagaUn!!!!…..ooooo seeeeeeeeee!!!!!

  65. sensation

    September 29, 2010 at 4:49 pm

    wonderful suspense. you had me there.

  66. Ronnie

    September 30, 2010 at 11:33 am

    Nice story.Made me hiss..in a good way!Suspense was killing!

  67. Albert

    September 30, 2010 at 10:38 pm

    I know, I’m late but omg! this is well written haha! to think it was their baby. Good one..

  68. saywot?

    October 7, 2010 at 9:44 pm

    ..forget!!!!! u got me bad!!!!!! u try gan-an!!!

  69. Kay 1..

    October 21, 2010 at 2:19 pm

    OMG!!! U GOT ME THERE…HOOK, LINE N SINKER…..Nice one…i’ve not seen this much suspense in such a short story in a while esp in Nig….cheers!!!

  70. viv

    November 12, 2010 at 2:20 am

    Boring n grossly over exaggerated..n I dnt need further opinions on my comment..*bats eyelids*

  71. Ms. Jayee

    November 25, 2010 at 3:17 pm

    DAYUM!!!!!!

  72. Beverly

    February 17, 2011 at 5:03 am

    As soon as I read …He was beautiful. His long eyelashes curled over…I knew it had to be a child. That is the exact way i feel and act with my son. He has lashes to die for. Sometimes I let his “only child syndrome” tears flow just so I can look at his wet lashes.

  73. james macpherson

    May 24, 2011 at 4:25 pm

    This is crazy,tight and full of suspense………..you should consult for nollywood.

  74. kiki

    May 24, 2011 at 9:43 pm

    Great write-up and the suspense is masterful but i quite agree that its slightly over-exaggerated. Its one thing to worry about ur husband’s concern over ur attachment to a child, its another to talk about ‘a betrayal of trust’ and ‘3 years into ur marriage’. And it made it appear somewhat contradictory when at the end, the man made light of the situation. But nice effort though.

  75. Rissa

    June 20, 2011 at 2:11 pm

    Nice write up Abbey, i almost tot otherwise too. I have seen a few male kids who have been over pampered in this regard and still wanna suckle their mums milk factory or drag it with their siblings because of the indulgence of their mothers allowing them access either on the bed while sleeping or while lazying around the house, so i just might relate with the whole scenario, however i also agree that for a write up of this nature the phrase “betraying his trust” and ‘giving up a two year old son to other females” ; which will not be happening any time soon was too intense. bottom line. it was extremely entertaining and i loved it. two thumbs up dude.

  76. Rissa

    June 20, 2011 at 2:14 pm

    Sowie_Abby, not Abbey, thumbs up gal.

  77. camo

    June 14, 2012 at 5:16 pm

    The only ppl who would think this is exaggereated are ppl that have not yet given birth. i agree i was carried away but i understand perfectly.

  78. Olori

    January 11, 2013 at 1:19 pm

    lol. Cool. You got me.

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